Story Title : Raisonnement, Confiance and Fric
Story URL: http://peaceful-pandemonium.blogspot.com/2010/04/raisonnement-confiance-and-fric.html
Reviewer: DarkAngel
Title: 5/5
-Very nice! It captured the readers’ attention! It related to the story and was very creative. Good job!
Poster/Background: -/10
-No points for this, but the picture was very nice! I thought it looked pretty.
Forewords: 5/5
-I guess I can count the introduction as the forewords. If so, then 5 POINTS! It was very unique and creative to add in the definitions of the words. That isn’t seen often in stories, so kudos for that.
Plot: 14/15
-It was a creative and different plot. I liked it. It was interesting when I found out they were female assassins. You don’t see those around anymore! It was nice to read something unique and different.
Flow: 8/10
-I didn’t find it rushed, but it was slightly lagging or slow. Since this was a one shot drabble, I couldn’t exactly tell.
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 14/15
-There were just a few typos and mistakes, but they weren’t huge ones. It’s one of those mistakes that are made when you type too fast and you don’t notice.
Characterization: 8/10
-You didn’t get to know the characters very well, like their past or experiences. It would have been better if you introduced the characters more.
Originality: 9/10
-Though the assassins were a nice touch, it sounded a little typical. I know I said that it was unique and different, but it could have been more. It would be more interesting if you added a twist or something like a “bang!”
Writing style: 8/10
-The paragraphs were a bit too big for me to read (probably because I’m younger). It was very detailed- perhaps too detailed for a one shot. It’s nice to tell a lot, but try to make it more simple. If it’s too formal, it’s more boring to read.
Overall enjoyment: 9/10
Overall score: 80/90
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