For A Moment by Ryeona Park

Title: For A Moment
Author: Ryeona Park
URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/PRNmoment
Reviewed by: Dark Angel @ Lost Shadows

Title: 5/5

-At first glance, your title captured my attention. It was interesting, and just those three words told a lot about the story. Good choice for a title.

Poster/Background: 9/10

-The poster is great, I can tell you that. The only change I'd make to it is the font. It's hard to read, but other than that it looks fantastic! The background matches with the story, and the blue clashes well. It's a nice, sad blend of colors to go along with a great story.

Forewords: 4/5

-That was a nice preview, but it didn't tell us much about the characters' personalities. I also thought you could have added more to the forewords. It looked too short. Besides the poster credits and summary, there wasn't anything else. A little introduction of the characters would probably help the reader understand them before reading in order to get a better understanding.

Plot: 14/15

-It's a sad, sweet story. The plot is nice, and the angels are a nice touch. I know this story line has been used many times before, but there's just a special touch to this one. It's really nice, and touching at the same time. I loved the ending!

Flow: 10/10

-The flow is perfect for me! The story was at a good pace- not too fast and not too slow. Nice job!

Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 13/15

-There were places where you added a comma in the wrong place and vice versa. I didn't spot any spelling errors, and your vocabulary was great! There were no repeats except for "The Third Angel", "The First Angel" and so and so. Other than that, there wasn't much of a grammatical problem here.

Characterization: 8/10
-I honestly could have though you should include more of their past and feelings. SeoHyun wasn't exactly described as well. The simple details were featured, which is good. I just thought you could be more deep with their emotions.

Originality: 8/10

-The Dimension of Miracles was creative, I can tell you that. You don't see that around nowadays. The sickness, however, is often mentioned in stories. It's because of a disease that the two main characters get close in a sad one-shot. I really liked the fake world and angels though!

Writing style: 8/10

-Your paragraphs were too big, in my opinion. If you shorten it, it will look more professional and neat. It may be because I like reading short paragraphs than longer ones, but it looks better. It's easier to read. Other than that, there was nothing wrong with your one-shot!

Overall enjoyment: 8/10
-Like I said before, the long paragraphs were a little irritating for me to look at. That took my interest away slightly.

Overall score: 87/100