It was you all along by iheartsj01

Author: iheartsj01
Story Name: It was you all along
Story URL: http://winglin.net/fanfic/iheartsj01/
Reviewer: myangelteuk/Airah

Title: 2.5/5
The title really isn’t eye catching but fits your story well. Also, capitalize you title like this, ‘It Was You All Along’.

Poster/Background: 10/10
At first I was wondering why Kyuhyun and Yoona was there but then in the story, it explains that Yoona is Leeteuk’s girlfriend (in the beginning) and Kyuhyun is the guy she fell in love with at first sight.

Forewords: 5/5
You got everything that is needed. But also, add at least an bit of information about the characters so we would know what to expect. Or just say that you can’t reveal anything about them yet.

Plot: 15/15
I really like the plot. Same as others but you add your own twists into it.

Flow: 10/10
Nice and steady. Neither fast or slow.

Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 8/15
I know it’s a low score but you do have to understand. You said in the extras that you’re going to have some English errors and yes, you do. Some of the errors would be that you sometimes don’t capitalize the beginning of sentences. I would give you an example but it’s almost everywhere. You spell things wrong.You also don’t capitalize the beginning of the dialogues and you forget the commas at the end of what they are saying.
For example:

[Original Dialogue]

" yah, just remember - don't tell this to anyone at school tomorrow okay ? im usually not like this to people " he said patting my head .

{Corrected Dialogue}

“Yah, just remember - don’t tell this to anyone at school tomorrow, okay? I’m usually not like this to people,” he said, patting my head.

Another problem would be the spelling errors. Two of the words that you commonly spell wrong would be:
*Thingking
*tought

By the looks of how you spell, you sound it out? Thinking is spelled this way. It’s like when you say ‘think’. All you have to do is add ‘-ing’ at the end.

Thought is spelled like this. But you are close. One other thing, if you spell thought the way you spell it, when you spell though, it might end up as tough. Also, hurt is already a past tense, so there is no need to add “-ed” at the end.

Characterization: 6/10
I think that if the character had a name, it would give off more than if the character’s name is ~~~~~.

Originality: 10/10
I think that this is quite original. Yet, similar to other fanfics. I didn’t take any points off because I think that it’s THAT original.

Writing style: 6/10
The writing style is understandable but I think instead of putting links in the middle of the story, you should either, describe it or put the links at the end so it doesn’t make the story look crappy. (Excuse my language). Also, don’t put too much exclamation mark and question marks because like I said, it makes it look crappy. But do put it where necessary. Another thing, you put this >.> at the end of the sentence, and it makes it look messy. At least describe what >.> is, but if its like a text, then it’s fine but if it isn’t, explain. Also, if you want to explain something, instead of putting an A/N note in the middle of the story, same with the links, put it at the end of the chapter.

Overall enjoyment: 10/10
I have to say, I enjoyed it because as you can tell, my name is myangelteuk so I am an Leeteuk fan! I agree that there aren’t many Leeteuk fics. I have to say, this is a good story! I’m going to subscribe to it so I can read more!! Hwaiting!

Overall score: 82.5/100

*This is just a review. It is not meant to criticize you. But if it did in anyway, I apologize.*