The Telephone Operator - iToots and detay.:]

Story Title : The Telephone Operator
Author : iToots and detay.:]
Story URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/cousins
Reviewed by aZn_sw3in @ lostshadows.co.nr

Warning : I have nothing against the author . I'm just a honest reviewer .

Title: 5/5
I love it . It's special and matches the plot . I would be curious if i read that title and then would click at it .

Poster/Background: 9/10
The poster is simple but still cute . Good job .
And i don't know why but i totally love the Background.

Forewords: 2/5 *
The forewords are really short . You could make the describtions longer . Also you could make a little preview or a prologue .

Plot: 14/15*
It's really cool and i never saw something like that here before . The end got me confused .

Flow: 9/10*
The end was abit rushed and it was a bit confusing.

Spelling/Grammer/Vocabulary: 9/10*
I saw some mistakes but your english is really good.

Characterization: 8/10*
I could see the personalities of the characters but you can improve more and describe them more .


Orginality: 10/10 *
Like is said before i never saw a story like that here on winglin . Good Job ! Keep up the good work ^^

Writing style: 4/5*
Your writing stlye is neat but sometimes abit messed but not often but that makes the story cute !

Overall enjoyment: 10/10 *
I enjoed it a Lot ! I'm a big GUIWANG fan . There aren't that many guiwang stories here . So i loved it .


Overall score: 80/100

I'm sorry that isn't really much but it still good k ?
I'm sure you can improve more and blew me away .