Momentum by BoBoLi0us

Title: Momentum

Author: BoBoLi0us

Story URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/Recollection02/

Reviewed by RyoMaXMaSuke @ lostshadows.co.nr

Note: Sorry for the lateness, I just took my exams my sister forced me not to use the computer for a week. T-T



Title: 4/5

- Very catchy title. I can see the relation of it with the story but the story doesn’t really explain the title wholly.



Poster/Background: 8/10

- The appearance of the story really went well with the theme and it gave the readers an idea of what the story would be like. But I think the poster could use a little more light, seeing that the momentum lasted longer than we expected.. It was also hard seeing the text in the poster, but all in all, I think the poster is beautiful.



Forewords: 4/5

- I really like the forewords and how it started because of how you wrote it, but it was a little uninteresting. And I think a little more insight or information about Jaebom would be nice, since it is one of those “You” fictions.



Plot: 1o/15

- Common and sort of overused plot. But the twists you placed in parts of the story was splendid, it made it more original.



Flow: 7/10

- For a side story, the flow was incredibly fine. But there were times when I get confused on what was happening.



Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 13/15

- I spotted some grammar mistakes wherein, you would mix up ‘present tense’ and ‘past tense’. Your spelling was a little off. I’ve seen spelling mistakes and you commit them on the same word.



Characterization: 7/10

- The characters were somehow not shown that well. But their personalities popped out in the story and made the story very interesting. Although, I think there is something missing in their personalities.



Originality: 13/10

- The storyline was like any other fanfic but with your writing style, it was somehow also very different from other fanfics.



Writing style: 7/10

- You have a very interesting writing style. But I think you need to be more descriptive of the surroundings and other things so that the story is vivid on each reader’s mind. Writing in first person really went well with the fanfiction for it was one of the “you” fics.



Overall enjoyment: 7/10

- I don’t know really know if I did. But it was very heartwarming to read and interesting. And



Overall score: 80/100