Always and Forever by Annie

Name: Annie
Story Title : Always and Forever
Story URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/UnknownUserA5
Reviewer: Doesn\'t matter


Title: 5/5

-Nice title; I like it. When I first saw the title, I thought it would be kind of a sad story, or maybe one that has angst in it, but I was totally off. I think the title fits with the story.


Poster/Background: 6/10

-There was no poster, so I can’t really give points for that. Also, the font slightly blended in with the background since they were both pink, so I had to highlight most of it because it made my eyes hurt trying to read it.


Forewords: 2/5

-The foreword barely told us what the collection was about. The only thing that we knew from it was it was going to be a one-shot collection of Super Junior members. You also told us it was fluff, but what if we wanted to know more about it? You could have told a little about the characters that are going to be involved because your collection was mostly about Donghae and Eunhyuk and they seem to have the same personalities over and over again.


Plot: 12/15

-Since this is a one-shot collection, it’s hard for me to count the points since I’m a rookie at reviewing, but the plot for the stories were funny. It was also entertaining to read, but some parts, you lost me there! It was like a rollercoaster: it had its ups and downs. In other words, it means that some parts, it turned good and sometimes it turned boring. In my point of view, I think it turned boring because the plot was predictable.


Flow: 10/10

-I thought that the flow was perfect. It wasn’t too fast or slow; it was just right.


Spelling/Grammer/Vocabulary: 13/15

-I found a few minor errors in your story, but it didn’t affect the story in any way like misunderstandings. I also think you could have used bigger vocabulary in your story. It would have made the story slightly more interesting and professional.


Characterization: 9/10

-I could understand the characters well, but I wished that since it was a collection of one-shots, the personalities would be different, but it’s not! Also, you could have used different couples, but you didn’t. I guess you like Eunhyuk and Donghae the best.


Orginality: 8/10

-Like I said, the story was predictable at times. Some were really creative while some were pretty dull. I’ve seen stories related to your one-shots before, but I would have expected some kind of twist to make the one-shots more interesting.


Writing style: 10/10

-I had no problem with your writing style. I liked it when you used “you” and “he” when you were referring to Donghae. I haven’t seen much stories that use those words before, but I like it.


Overall enjoyment: 8/10

-It was nice, but like I said, it gets boring at times. Good effort though.


Overall score: 83/100