Lost Prince by MKL

Title: Lost Prince
URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/MKL4/
Reviewer: hanichan32319

Title: 4/5
You caught my attention right off the bat! A picture of Jaejoong with the title made me think, “Did he get lost or something? XD”

Poster/Background: 9/10
I would give you a perfect score, but Jaejoong holding the gun confused me. Was there any need to have that in the poster? Other than that, it’s lovely. Jae standing next to a plane gave the impression of a WWII pilot. The background matched the poster, and it was easy to read the font.

Forewords: 5/5
Absolutely nothing wrong with your forewords. All is good there. You gave a small preview of the story, explained it was for a challenge and even included your title in the dialogue. Nice work!

Plot: 14/15
Everything fit together at the end, and it was a very romantic plot…<3 YAY!

Flow: 9/10
For a quick second, during the flashback/story, I was confused. I didn’t know if you were talking about the modern day couple or the WWII couple. But everything cleared up as I kept reading. Just be careful, okay? It’s nothing serious, just a helpful hit, okay?

Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 10/10
I found almost no mistakes in your work. ^^

Characterization: 9/10
I only had one small beef, and that was with you not really talking much about Mr. Lee. However, since there is only so much you can say in a oneshot, I won’t dock you too many points.

Orginality: 9/10
You don’t see many things on winglin involving World War II. I was pleasantly surprised at that.

Writing style: 5/5
You didn’t lose me, unlike a lot of authors that switch POV every five sentences.

Overall enjoyment: 10/10
This is like the first time I have honest to God L O V E D a story that I’ve reviewed. You made me cry at the end, but they were happy tears. I cried when the old woman was talking about how she’d be joining her husband soon. That really touched my heart. You did a freaking awesome job!!!

Overall score: 84/100