Reality Overdose by Sung.ii.ee

Story Title: Reality Overdose
URL: www.winglin.net/fanfic/Overdose
Author: Sung.ii.ee
Reviewed by: Moon Mistress @ Lost Shadows

Title: 4/5
Sounds special and unique but I think it appeared a little too often in your story…

Poster/Background: 7/10
It looks good and all but it looks just a little too dark… I mean although it maybe kind of sad, I would prefer it better if it was a more… yellow-green background. This is because Abby is an angel and stuff so a lighter colored background would be a little more suitable… also, perhaps it is just me, but I think that Abby’s eyes on the poster just look a little too dark because of the eyeliner which doesn’t make her look that angelic...

Forewords: 4/5
Enough to keep me reading but I am a rather picky person and I personally, I like forewords that begin with the story. As in perhaps you could use some event to express the characters emotions? You get me?

Plot: 13/15
Erm, although I won’t say that it was totally new or anything, but it was certainly a story worth reading. =D

Flow: 7/10
Nice speed over there. Just that I think you might have move a little too fast.
Spelling/Grammer/Vocabulary: 7/10
Occasional error from place to place. But you said that it was because of Microsoft Word right? So I guess that other than that, it should be alright. =D

Characterization: 8/10
Nicely depicted and I could see that your characters attitude throughout the whole story did not contradict with your forewords which is something that most writers fail to do.

Orginality: 6.5/10
I don’t know. It was kind of refreshing and stuff throughout the whole thing. But if you were to break the elements and events of your story, you will see that the plot has been used in different places before. Like angel coming to earth, angel-mortal love, depression when your beloved dies, etc etc.

Writing style: 3/5
Alright and stuff. But just a little too much speech… more descriptions would have help =D

Overall enjoyment: 7/10
Had a great time reviewing =D
Overall score: 76.5 /100