One more, just one more chance by Mai

One more, just one more chance by Mai
http://winglin.net/fanfic/mangalover93_1/
Reviewed by changminXmc @ lostshadows.co.nr

*Take note that I have nothing against this author or is bashing him/her. Please don't take this seriously, but only as advice to improve your writing.

Title: 3/5
- Title wasn't really fit for the story. But I guess it somehow did have a connection with it.

Poster/Background: 7/10
-I think the poster is really pretty, but the background should've been purple. Thats just how I felt but none other less, it didn't bother me.

Forewords: 4/5
- I thought the forward was really short, yet, it was really sad and interesting. But I think you could've wrote more.

Plot: 13/15
- I wasn't sure what to give you, but I guess your plot was pretty good. I liked it.

Flow: 9/10
- Your flow wasn't fast or too slow, but I think you could've wrote more details or more to some parts of the story.

Spelling/Grammer/Vocabulary: 8/10
-I did see a few grammars but not really noticable.

Characterization: 9/10
- In the forward, you told us about the pairing, but didn't reall tell us about them. But it was ok, since we were going to find out later in the story of how the character acts.

Orginality: 8/10
- I don't see that much plots like this, well half of the plot was orignal, but the other half was something new. I think you were really creative with this plot.

Writing style: 3/5
-I really did not like how you wrote this story. I mean for example, you would continuely write "you" when it should've been "I, Me, Myself, Mine". It was getting on my nerves but I thought that it was ok. So you might want to change those "you" to "I, Me, Myself, Mine." It would sound much better and make more sense.

Overall enjoyment: 8/10
- I guess this story was really interesting towards the ending. When you killed the girl, I thought, it was kinda harsh how you killed her off like that. Though I understand that she hurt Seung Ri and she should get hurt too but thought it was kinda harsh. And never did I ever think you would kill Seung Ri off like that. I was like omg! You killed him! It was sad that Ji Young realized it too late. All that really threw me off, and it was interesting. You did a great job writing this story!
Overall score: 72/100