Shattered Memories - 13nz

Title : Shattered Memories
Author : 13nz
URL : http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/13nz/
Reviewed by : jyyms


Title: 4/5



Your title sounds really romantic to me. But I didn't give you full marks because it only concerned to four sixth of the story. Later, it wasn't about memories.



Poster/Background: 9/10



The poster and background are a great piece of art. But the mood was a bit too happy for the story. "Shattered" seems to be really sad but the poster was moody.



Forewords: 5/5



Your forewords was meaningful and straight to the point. It was also short and had great details about the story. Good job.



Plot: 13/15



The plot of your story is quite interesting. I liked it how both Jaejoong and Hyun Ji lost their memories. It gave the story a twist and made it more interesting. But I didn't like it that it was a bit short for me. :P



Flow: 10/10



The flow is perfect. I don't see where you went too fast or too slow. Thumbs up for this one.



Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 10/15



I'm sad to give you 5 marks off but there were a lot of grammatical errors. Your spelling and vocabulary were great but you had tenses mixed up. For example..



Instead of saying ,"They were already dating for a month without no one knows. " it should be "They were already dating for a month without anyone knowing."



Characterization: 9/10



Yunho, Jaejoong and Hyun Ji were nicely shaped characters. But I need to know more about Junsu and the rest. If you could just add in bit by bit of details for the others, it would be great!



Originality: 8/10



The idea of how a couple gets into an accident and lost their memory is REALLY common in fan fiction. So it is not quite original. BUT, like I told you, the fact that both of them lost their memories was a great twist. I also like the way Jaejoong and Hyun Ji acted towards each other. It is different from most stories I have read.



Writing style: 9/10



Your writing style is a bit childish but I find it very cute. I loved the way you wrote your chapters. It was easy to read and I had a warm feeling while reading it.



Overall enjoyment: 10/10



Aheheh. I am a BIG DBSK fan so I always enjoy reading their fan fictions. Even though my favorite isn't Jaejoong nor Junsu, I still enjoyed the story very much. I like reading romance fan fiction and yours was a good one. I like the plot and everything. Thank you for writing this story. I finished it at one go! I was that attached! :) :)



Overall score: 87/100



Great job! Loved it.