Let's Not by Susan Lee

Story Title: Let's Not
Story Author: Susan Lee
Story URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/suxsan/
Reviewer: Darkess

Title: 5/5

By the end it fit so well, and it's easy to pick out on the winglin list. I know I saw it so many times ><

Poster/Background: 10/10

Aww they're so pretty! and the torn background and darker poster pull the readers in. It makes you wonder why everything is a little bit darker than a happy love story. The colors don't interfere with the text, and after reading multiple chapters it doesn't give you an eye sore.

Forewords: 4/5

You give interesting little tidbits on the characters ahead, but I wish you would have given a short little sneak peek on the story so readers could want to read the story ahead and think that's it will be an amazing story and that it will be a good story to read before it even begins.

Plot: 15/15

There were so many weird but awesome twists in this story that I loved, like Donghae cheating, and them even getting together in the first place. And I definately wasn't expecting her to leave in the end o.o this was an amazing story and I liked it a lot ^^

Flow: 8/10

A lot of things happened in good time, but a year is a really long ways to skip ahead by, don't you think? and at first that was a little confusing, but it makes sense now that I've completed the story ^^

Spelling/Grammer/Vocabulary: 7/15

I noticed that a lot of the time you didn't have any end marks at... the end of your sentences. You should really fix that ><

Then my phone rung again - chapter 1

Then my phone rang again is probably how it should have been put.

Your Leeteuk's mom - chapter 1

You're should have been used there.

He hung up... - chapter 1

He hang up.

their my two favorite members - chapter 1

they're should have been used.

but I dont - chapter 1

you forgot the ' in don't

Atleast not close one's - chapter 1

At least not close ones.

what my parents job required. - chapter 1

forgot the ' again ><

i didnt want to be rude. - chapter 1

Capital I

if your Michael Friggin Jackson, - chapter 1

you're should be used, but it was a funny line XD

doens't - chapter 2

Obviously should be doesn't XD

"Yup I didnt think- - chapter 2

didnt needs one of these ' XD

THATS - chapter 2

need a '

Yesung looked like he just saw the Ring girl - chapter two

*cough* that's Samara to you XD pwah it isn't a grammar mistake don't worry, but I wasn't going to tell you her name anywhere else XD

Your tall!" - chapter 2

You're should be used

"Yeah yeah just dont - chapter 2

' again

My favorite members not here - chapter 3

Member is is how it should read ><

Lets - chapter 3

forgot one of these '... again

doens't - chapter three

doesn't

HYUNG YOUR SCREAMING - chapter 3

Hyung you're screaming

YOUR ONE TO TALK - chapter 3

you're

But atleast - chapter three

a space needs to be added

Not that they arn't! - chapter 3

Aren't is how it is spelled

Your so cute" - chapter 4

you're

your blushing" - chapter 4

you're

ANd I laughed - chapter 4

just a capitalization error

No I'm not gay their just so pretty - chapter 4

they're

got their (chapter 5)

got there

He acts like their normal people! (chapter 5)

He acts like they're normal people!

Your hands trembling" (chapter 5)

Your hand's trembling"

their not working today. (chapter 7)

they're not working today.

Kangn (chapter 7)

Kangin

your going to scare the neighbors" (Chapter 7)

you're going to scare the neighbors"

ARN'T (chapter 7)

AREN'T

hes okay (chapter 8)

he's okay

women (chapter 8)

woman

your crying" (chapter 8)

you're crying"

YOUR (chapter 8)

YOU'RE

dont know either (chapter 9)

don't know either

your (chapter 9)

you're

life Kibum (Chapter 9)

life, Kibum

their (chapter 9)

they're

their (chapter 9)

they're

their (chapter 9)

there

FIne (chapter 9)

Fine

Their watching (chapter 9)

They're watching

Your gay (chapter 10)

You're gay

Cause we (chapter 10)

Cause we're

the bang is (chapter 10)

the gang is

met in pretty (chapter 10)

met is pretty

Your up (chapter 10)

You're up

their (Chapter 10)

there

your next (chapter 12)

you're

your so (chapter 12)

you're so

dongdangs! (chapter 13)

dongsangs ... i think o.o not sure on spelling XD

yesterdays (chapter 13)

yesterday's

DOnghae (chapter 13)

Donghae

shotting straight up (chapter 13)

shooting straight up

in a (chapter 13)

in an

and their (chapter 14)

and they're

worship god (chapter 14)

worship God

yesung (chapter 14)

Yesung

away form the (chapter 14)

away from the

Their like (chapter 14)

They're like

god no one saw that (chapter 14)

God no one saw that

heechul (chapter 14)

Heechul

girlfrineds (chapter 15)

girlfriends

their like (chapter 15)

they're like

your really ( chapter 15)

you're really

eunhyuk (chapter 16)

Eunhyuk

lol and you always say Mihane, and it's mianhe XD

out movie (chapter 16)

our movie

No i don't! (chapter 17)

No I don't!

your driving (chapter 17)

you're driving

guess your a (chapter 17)

guess you're a

and your getting (chapter 16)

and you're getting

And your going (chapter 17)

And you're going

Their siblings! (chapter 17)

They're siblings!

Leeteuk hyun just (chapter 17)

Leeteuk hyung just

me your going (chapter 18)

me you're going

And i headed (chapter 18)

And I headed

YOUR DOING (chapter 18)

YOU'RE DOING

that i was (chapter 18)

that I was

Stop, your scaring (chapter 18)

Stop, you're scaring

heard your (chapter 18)

heard you're

He siad (chapter 18)

He said

Their my favorite (chapter 19)

They're my favorite

Your just (chapter 19)

You're just

their concerned (chapter 19)

they're just

why your up (chapter 19)

why you're up?

dongdangs (chapter 19)

dongsangs

but i think it can also be spelled dongsaengs too. i see it that way a lot in stories.

got their (chapter 20)

got there

whose here with us? (chapter 21)

who's here with us?

whose always (chapter 21)

who's always

Is aid, (chapter 22)

I said

the mike (chapter 23)

the mic

and their not. (chapter 23)

and they're not.

"MOH?!" (chpater 24)

I'm almost positive that it's boh, not moh ><

your doing (chapter 24)

you're doing

i said, (chapter 24)

I said,

i deleted (chapter 24)

I deleted

Your even (chapter 25)

You're even

whose a new (chapter 27)

who's a new

my boyfriends (chapter 27)

my boyfriend's

then punch him (chapter 28)

then punched him

Leetek and (chapter 30)

Leeteuk and

your here (chapter 30)

you're here

and i (chapter 30)

and I

YOUR surprised (chapter 30)

YOU'RE surprised

YOUR AN (chapter 30)

YOU'RE AN

your fine (chapter 32)

you're fine

off voices (chapter 32)

of voices

Your only (chapter 32)

You're only

and seriously. ending punctuation would be really nice ><

Characterization: 10/10

You built on all of the characters a lot. I know that 14 characters is hard to handle, but you did it really well and were able to build on everyone's personality very well, so great job there ^^

Orginality: 8/10

I've seen a lot of stories with this main idea of someone going to live with them (you inspired me to write one too ^^ don't worry, I mentioned you and how this was your idea) ANYWAYS, but I HAVE seen this idea before, but besides that.... I think it was really creative and unique ^^

Writing style: 7/10

Your one liners were easy to read, but I would have loved to see some actual paragraphs in the story. Also, I would have liked to see some detail in the story too, like what their room looked like (besides clean) and stuff. But besides that, I love how you write and tell your story XD keep it up

Overall enjoyment: 8/10

The car scene in chapter three was so funny ^.^ ok so basically this WHOLE STORY was amazingly funny and good ^^ when you're done with the sequel ask me to review again. I promise I'll actually get it done quickly this time T.T OMO. saw this and HAD TO MENTION IT
"Yoobin noona!" Changmin yelled

"My crazy hamster!" I yelled, hugging him

made me laugh SO HARD XDD

I loved the music awards chapter ^^

AND THIS!

"Seungri! Let go!" Ji-Yong said, pulling him off

"But I love Yoobin noona!" Seungri said, trying to reach me

OMG I LOVE YOU TOO!

SOO FUNNY

and THIS

Not to mention Kangin got 'scared' and hit Heechul with a pan

lol i think im done pointing out things that made me laugh >< it'll just get annoying XD

but you're a great comedy author even if it wasn't SUPPOSED to be. well if it was intentional it was amazing and if it wasn't.... you're a genius o.o XD

this story had me laughing the whole time XD I loved it a lot

Overall score: 83/100

R/N sorry about the UBER LONG wait >< I procrastinate T.T