Worlds Collide by Bonnie :]

Name: Bonnie :]
Story Title : Worlds Collide
Story URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/aquasprings_2/
Reviewer: jyyms

Title: 4/5
Your title suits your story well but it doesn't look very appealing to the reader.
Poster/Background: 8/10
The poster was a great work of art and it suits the story but the background just wasn't the one. The color is too gloomy at the back while the story is about water spirits, air spirits, etc. It should be more lively.
Forewords: 4/5
Your forewords was pretty straight forward. But I think you put a little too much information on the spirits, which might bore the reader.
Plot: 10/15
Your plot was somehow orignal in a way but not fully. This kind of plot can be seen in ancient Chinese dramas. I liked it how everything was divided into elements, it was pretty neat.
Flow: 4/10
I don't know if you wanted your story to be in this way but your flow was very fast. Each event happened in a blink of an eye. The first few chapters were acceptable but the rest were not because the climax of the story went really fast. I really think you need to improve on your flow.
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 14/15
I noticed only a few spelling mistakes but they were just minor errors. Your grammar was is great and your vocabulary was acceptable. Good Job!
Characterization: 6/10
Your main characters were not described in detail. The poster helps but your descriptions were poor. The reader will not have a clear idea of how Ya Tou or Wang Zi look like or feel like.
Orginality: 7/10
Like I said in the plot section, your plot is not fully original. But you had your twists and turns that made your story stand out from the other ones.
Writing style: 10/10
Your writing style was good. I liked the way you wrote your chapters. Really good job on that one!
Overall enjoyment: 7/10
To be honest, I didn't really enjoy the story. Please don't feel offended but battles and spirits are not my cup of tea. But you did good on making your story interesting compared to other stories with this plot.
Overall score: 60/100

Great job! And please take this review as an advice for your future stories!