Canvas Castles by Seo.Tai.Mi

Story Title: Canvas Castles
URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/SeoTaiMi/
Author: Seo.Tai.Mi
Reviewed by: Moon Mistress @ Lost Shadows

Title: 4.5/5
Extremely unique title. That’s all I am going to say :D

Poster/Background: 8 /10
I like your poster. It feels a little tragic? I don’t know… it just feels a little olden because of the color and somehow to me things from the past are usually sad… haha XD but your quote was a little difficult to see because it went in to the male lead’s shirt… and it was really hard to read on orange font…

Forewords: 4.5 /5
As much as I hate to say this, I can’t find any fault with your forwards… but the thing is I feel that you might want to consider adding a rather inspirational quote of something like that? Something that actually provokes deep thought.

Plot: 13/15
I would say that in general it was really good. But then if you open the plot and look at several events, you will actually realize that someone has used it before so it gets a little expected and cliché. But then again, stories have to have a certain amount of cliché-ness right?

However, I am someone who actually takes into account of practicality as in when I read something; I actually try to think if it is actually possible. As in one thing I can’t stand is when too many coincidences happen. I know, I know there is a reason why “drama” is called drama, it’s because there must be a certain degree of drama in it. But then the Moon Mistress is some kind of perfectionist and a very critical person. So do bear with her. =D


Flow: 7.5/10
No major problems but occasionally I felt that you were rushing through. However, the last few chapters were really good as in flow and description wise. Are you getting better or did you just “feel” for those chapters?

Spelling/Grammer/Vocabulary: 8 /10
F-A-N-T-A-S-T-I-C!!! However, I won’t give you full marks because I want to give you room for improvement. :D For example just add in a few more similes but fantastic descriptions. But a few grammatical errors here and there, but once again the strong description just help cover most of it. =D

Characterization: 9 /10
It’s REALLY, REALLY good. Especially for Abby since she is actually a frictional character. I mean I could kind of picture Abby. As for your other characters, I felt that they were really nicely developed to since I admit that I am not what you would call the ultimate Korean fan. :D

Orginality: 7/10
A few interesting twist and turns but just like what I said in the plot section… good try though =D

Writing style: 4 /5
Can’t find any fault here. But in this area, I am not trying to find problems but I am rather looking for cool ways of writing. So keep experimenting =D

Overall enjoyment: 8/10
I was a total pleasure reading your story. No major grammatical problems, good description, cool plot. What more can a reviewer wish for? I got to say had this been my favorite couple. It might just be one of my favorite stories. Keep up the good work! And continue bringing good writing to winglin =D
Overall score: 73.5/100
Sorry dear, the thing about me is that when the writing starts getting real strong, I tend to get REALLY strict. But then the numbers don’t really matter, right? Hope that there were a few useful things you picked up.

Anyways, get well soon!