Wedding by for3v3r

Wedding by for3v3r
Story URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/bebuwed
Reviewer: jwyl


Title: 3/5
I feel like the title is not catchy enough.

Poster/Background: 10/10
I really love the poster and the background.

Forewords: 3/5
I was a bit disappointed because it didn’t tell much about the story.

Plot: 12/15
It wasn’t bad. I like the storyline. But it was just a bit too short for me.

Flow: 8/10
It did flow for me for most of the story. Everything was well organized. But it was the ending that caught me a bit. I was a bit disappointed how it just ended like that.

Spelling/Grammer/Vocabulary: 10/10
You had everything correct.

Characterization: 8/10
I could sort of imagine the scene that I was reading. But because it was quite short, I didn’t have enough information in my head to get the entire scene.

Orginality: 8/10
I thought it was quite orginal. I like the idea of Hebe being betrayed because of what she did to Ian.

Writing style: 5/5
I like your writing style. And everything is so neat and looks great. It’s not sloppy.

Overall enjoyment: 9/10
Just a bit too short. >_<

Overall score: 86/100

Sorry if you don’t like your mark, but I think the main problem was that it was just a bit too short. I prefer reading long stories.