Dedicated by ctanonymous
http://winglin.net/fanfic/ctanonymous_4/
Reviewed by : Rachael
Title: 4/5
The title suits the story a lot but I don’t find it catchy and it was quite common.
Poster/Background: 9/10
I simply love the poster and the background! Simple and nice. It matches the story a lot, and it did express how lonely Hebe was. Marks for readable text.
Forewords: 4/5
I like how you started off your forewords and nice character introduction you have there. But I would prefer you to slowly tell us your character’s personalities through the story not like how you have it in the forewords.
Plot: 12/15
I guess that the plot was well thought out and it went well though the plot was cliché. It was predictable and all but since this was for Valentine’s, it was a nice story. Furthermore, I’m sure that this happens to a lot of people, and surely, for this fic, they’ll get back together again in the end.
Flow: 9/10
The flow was great! It didn’t go too fast or too slow. I thought that maybe you could’ve written more on the ending. I somehow felt like the ending just ended fast.
Spelling/Grammer/Vocabulary: 9/10
I don’t know if it was my eyesight or whatever, but I didn’t spot any spelling mistakes and that’s a ‘wow!’. Not everyone could avoid spelling mistakes so perfectly.
And I did not spot any grammar mistakes (except for one) so all’s good.
Vocabulary’s above average (:
Characterization: 8/10
They were characterized well though I think that you could’ve write or described more about them, to make them more stand out.
Orginality: 5/10
I wouldn’t say that this fiction of yours is original since it was really cliché and you can see it in a lot of fictions in Winglin, but it was still a nice story overall.
Writing style: 4/5
I’m fine with your writing style. Easy to read and understand but could’ve been more descriptive.
Overall enjoyment: 9/10
It was nice to read, a really cute one shot though it bore me a little :P
Overall score: 73/100
Note : I’m sorry that it took me quite a while to finish this review. School life had been hectic with me ):
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