6 Words That Hurt - Asian_Innocence

Title: 6 Words That Hurt [JongHoon - FT Island]
Author: Asian_Innocence
URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/wtsc/chapter_3.shtml
Reviewer: hanichan32319 @ Lost Shadows

Title: 5/5
Nice job on the title! When someone says the sky is crying, it usually sets up for a sad story, but it could also have the literal meaning of rain, which you included in the story (not sure if you meant to, but oh well, you did!) and for that I applaud you.

Poster/Background: 8/10
On one hand, your poster is absolutely amazing, and the background is dark, so it’s easer on the eyes. But you didn’t include JongHoon on the poster! However, it is possible that you requested the poster without realizing that you would have a story with a member of FT Island, so I won’t dock you COMPLETELY. The color scheme you did was AWESOME. I love that particular shade of blue you got going on in the poster.

Forewords: 5/5
You did something that not many authors do, though I wish they did it: you included a legend of some Korean words you commonly use, and those can always affect someone who has no preexisting knowledge of the language. *high fives you*

Plot: 15/15
SO TRAGIC. I LOVE IT! Everyone likes writing happy endings because sometimes they can’t bear to kill off their characters, but you aren’t. Plus, the whole falling-out-of-love situation was a nice touch. Usually, authors have some blackmail reason behind a couple breaking up, but this was true “I seriously don’t love you anymore.” *claps*

Flow: 9/10
Your flow was good. Excellent job.

Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 14/15
Your spelling was excellent, except there were a few common typing errors. It’s okay, though. No one’s perfect.

Characterization: 9/10
I wish there had been some backstory between your main character and JongHoon! But wishes can’t be fishes, right? Other than that, nothing was wrong with the way you developed them. JongHoon was the “perfect boyfriend” who met the wrong fate. MiRoo was the girlfriend who fell out of love with her boyfriend.

Originality: 10/10
You don’t see too many stories based off chain letters. ^^ YAY! I loved that little sidenote. It’s almost like you’re saying, “Hey, I didn’t just pull this out of thin air, but I also didn’t read the romance stories that come a dime a dozen.” Good job!

Writing style: 10/10
*squeals* You pulled away from common third-person POV and used the present tense. You know, instead of “I sat down on my desk” it was “I sit down on my desk.” I don’t know why that catches my eye, but it did. I really, really liked it!

Overall enjoyment: 10/10
From your review, I hope you can tell that I loved, loved, LOVED this story. I even took the time to read your other oneshots (which were all well-written, I might add). DBSK is most definitely my fave kpop group, and when I read your other stories, I really wanted to cry at some. ^^ You did a superb job, and I’ll be looking out for more stories from you in the future!