My So called Love!? I think - Sin Yan

Story Title: My So called Love!? I think
Author: Sin Yan
URL: http://winglin.net/fanfic/aysy
Reviewed by: changminXmc @ Lost Shadows


* Take further notice, I do not know this author, and do not mean to offend or bash her/him. This is only base on what I think and as a reviewer. This is only for her/him to improve on her writing skills.

Title: 3/5
* I did not like the title. It didn't quite fit the story in my opinion. But I think it was cute.
Poster/Background: 7/10
* I guess the poster was good. But I think the mood or color should've been something more darker. Some angst feeling in it.
Forewords: 4/5
* For me, I didn't think you need to tell the characters whole information. Cause they would've found out about it later on in the chapter of the story. But its fine even if you did list the informations. But the forward of the story was kind of short. Though it did not give off any conclusion for the ending.
Plot: 12/15
* I don't know, I really don't think there's anything special about this plot. Its very common, and I do see lots of these stories around lately.
Flow: 8/10
* I did feel as if you were rushing through the story, at some parts and such. You could've slow down or given it a smooth pace and give me details.
Spelling/Grammer/Vocabulary: 11/15
* You had several spelling errors throughout the stories, which made me angry. As I read, some of the sentence did not make sense.
For example:

Da Ya: hey gui Gui? do you to go somewhere after school.
It should've been:
Da Ya: Hey Gui Gui, do you want to go somewhere after school?

Characterization: 10/10
* It was perfect!
Orginality: 6/10
* Nothing special about the plot. It's very common to me.
Writing style: 6/10
* I seriously did not like how you write your story. The writing style is really different. Most writers would write this:
At Xiao Yu's seat
Gui Gui: Ge!
Xiao Yu: yes miss bossy
Gui gui: hey don't call me that name. fine if you call me that name than I'll call you...ummmm.... I know. YOU PIG
Xiao Yu: but anyways what do you want?
Gui Gui: im going shopping with Da Ya and Xiao Xun. ok?
Xiao Yu: yea yea whatever i don't care. ok
gui gui: thanks ge!
Like this:
At Xiao Yu's seat. "Ge!" Gui Gui asked. "Yes Miss bossy?" Xiao Yu asked. "Hey, don't call me that name! Fine, if you cann me that name than I'll call you...ummm...I know, YOU PIG!" Gui Gui said. "But anyways, what do you want?" Xiao Yu asked. "I'm going shopping with Da Ya and Xiao Xun ok?" Gui Gui asked her brother. "Yeah yeah, whatever. I don't care, ok." Xiao Yu said. "Thanks Ge!" Gui Gui thanked.

Overall enjoyment: 4/10
* I'm very sorry but I did not like this story. Out of all the taiwanese stories I've reviewed, this is the one that I did not enjoy while reviewing. It was rather boring, normal, and not interesting. Don't take this the wrong way, I just did not like it cause I am not a taiwanese fan that much. I did not mean to offend you but it was also rather weird how they were speaking Japanese, that was random. And also, how Jaejoong ended up in this fic. Though do try you're best next time! Good luck!
Overall score: 71/100
P.S.
That's a pretty good score. ^^ Didn't mean to offend you, if I did, I'm sorry. *bows*