One Minute, One Second by EMI

Story Title: One Minute, One Second
URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/OneForever/
Author: EMI
Reviewed by: Moon Mistress @ Lost Shadows

Title: 3/5
Quite a suitable title and it seems to be like a desperate cry out to have just a little more time with the people who mean something to them.

Poster/Background: 7/10
I like the feeling of that poster, but I doubt it will be a poster that I will actually remember 6 months later,,,

Forewords: 4/5
I like your forewords because it generates interest but at the same time, it is not too… direct? Good job there =D

Plot: 7/15
I can’t really grade your story at this point in time. However, at chapter 9, I feel that the beginning of your story doesn’t seem to be going a little too slowly…

Flow: 6/10
Just like what I said, the flow would be much better if it was faster…

Spelling/Grammer/Vocabulary: 10/15
Smooth and easy to read but you can always use more descriptive words and I am sure that it would add much color to your writings =D Also, perhaps cut down on all the vulgarities? This is because I personally feel that the use of such words too frequently will result in your story becoming less… erh classy?

Characterization: 7/10
Average? I mean I can do a character map on them but they don’t seem THAT unique? You get me? The one in a million kind of character?

Orginality: 5/10
I can’t really gauge at this stage since there is still much to go for your story…

Writing style: 7/10
Diary format is something rather new which makes it interesting. However, the bad thing about this way of writing is that you can’t really describe too much since it is after all a diary.

Overall enjoyment: 6/10
Not a bad read at all but I still need more storyline to be able to give you a more honest opinion.
Overall score: 62/100