River Flows in You - Yunni

Story Title: River Flows in You
Story Author: Yunni
Story URL: http://winglin.net/fanfic/_riverflow/
Reviewer: Darkess

*My reviews are not meant to harm or discourage the author, but to help them fix their stories and do better in the future. The opinions expressed in this review are mine and mine alone, and are not meant to offend you*


Title: 5/5

AHH LOVE THIS SONG SO MUCH! and taeminie playing it... <33 BUT THEN JAEBEOM PLAYED IT TOOOOOO! <3333 anyways, I've loved this song forever, and when I saw the title my face lit up XD

Poster/Background: 10/10

so pretty ^^ Love the fonts, and the color scheme is amazing ^^ the pics are really nice too, especially of Taemin playing the piano XD

Forewords: 5/5

I loved the teaser ^^ It definately would have had me coming back for more if you didn't have the actual story up yet ^^ You also stated characters, which I though was excellent.

Plot: 15/15

Eunnie -.- you're one of the only winglin writers that can make me cry EVERY SINGLE TIME I READ ONE OF YOUR STORIES. Well... not cry... but like tear up you know? nothing ever actually FALLS. but this line "It was from an angel's wings." SO BEAUTIFUL! ahh it was so short but so good.

Flow: 7/10

I was a little confused after the bullet wound... because had she already died and was just visiting him as an angel? and that's why he didn't stop playing or say "i love you too" ne? WELL, i was still a little confused by it at first T.T and eunnie! TAEMIN HAS ANTIS!? how could you hate Taemin? T.T

Spelling/Grammer/Vocabulary: 15/15

NO GRAMMAR MISTAKES! YUNNI YOU GET TO BE IN MY HALL OF FAME!!!! *squeels* so happy! great job ;D

Characterization: 6/10

Of course I loved the characters, but you didn't really put much description about them into this WAY too short of a story :P I also would have liked to see more building into the personalities, but I understand that that is hard to do in a one shot.

Orginality: 8/10

Ok, now I'm starting to see TONS of stories where the characters die for each other, or don't bget together in the end or something, but the angel thing was really unique and I loved that. Also, the piano piece and how you intertwined that into the story, even into a quote. That was original.

Writing style: 8/10

Yunni you know I love your writing style... especially because you're able to draw me into the story in such a short amount of time, but eunnie... there needs to be just a little more detail in the story. I know it's hard with a one shot, but but but but but descriptions... you need them ><

Overall enjoyment: 10/10

Love love love it! XDD There isn't really much I can say on top of that. Lost for words I guess. Seriously love the angel thing, the last line was amazing, just the whole story was amazing. The little flashbacks in time, them meeting, their secret relationship and him not being able to yell at her... so cute and so good.

Overall score: 89/100

R/N Yunni I was getting worried that you were going to get perfect scores >< I'm not allowed to give out perfect scores! XD I'm supposed to be a tough reviewer! >< But you still get a place in my hall of fame for perfect grammar. congratz!