Black Hole of Happiness by RAINxclouds

Title: Black Hole of Happiness
Author: RAINxclouds
Story URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/Song_o1/
Reviewed by RyoMaXMaSuke@lostshadows.co.nr

Title: 4/5
- The title made very perfect sense and it also made a point out of life. Although, I had a hard time deciding whether the title matched the story while I was reading, I just see the connection of the title with the story, only at the last two parts or maybe just the end.

Poster/Background: 10/10
- Your poster and Background matches well with your story. Color black is the perfect color to express black hole. Your poster is very elegant and the sad theme and the black and white color of the poster really matches your story.

Forewords: 4/5
- You did a very good job in this section, you practically summarized their whole past in the forewords. Although, I have a small problem. I think it would be better to at least put anything about the characters in the forewords, because like me, there may be people who know little about the characters in your story.

Plot: 12/15
- At first, I really couldn’t the plot. I was really confused since it was changing P.O.Vs and then it would suddenly change to this to this. So yes, I was completely confused. But as I read on, I finally got the story. And when I finally got, I thought it was very interesting and unique in some ways but also a little same to other stories in some ways. But I do really like the plot and it’s message.

Flow: 7/10
- The flow was, how can I say it?, unstable. There were some moments that you rushed and there were some that needs a little more description of what happened. So it made me really confused with the story.

Spelling/Grammer/Vocabulary: 12/15
- I spotted some typos and I think you could make your vocab wider but I just spotted little spelling and grammar mistakes. So it was okay.

Characterization: 8/10
- You really expressed their feelings well especially because you changed P.O.Vs but I do think that Minhwan should also get a P.O.V like you intended, because he is also one of the very important characters.

Orginality: 9/10
- I can very well say that this story is very Original, it’s very fresh. Also the plot is very original because you sort of gave a new perspective of life with your plot.

Writing style: 7/10
- I really like your writing style, but I think you can improve it more. Try to describe more of what is happening, where it was happening, what the characters were doing and feeling.

Overall enjoyment: 8/10
- As much as I enjoyed it I was really confused but your story is really one of those that gives messages, and that’s what I like most in stories. Hope to see you writing more. Good Luck!

Overall score: 81/100