Eye of Raven by Pararae

Author: Pararae
Story Title: Eye of Raven
Story URL: http://peaceful-pandemonium.blogspot.com/2010/04/eye-of-raven.html
Reviewer: DarkAngel

Title: 5/5

-Very creative! Your title sounds really interesting and it captured my attention. What I expected was completely wrong. “Eye of Raven” sounds dangerous and daring- just like assassins.


Poster/Background: 7/10

-You didn’t exactly have a poster, but the banner looks really nice. I can’t give you a 10 since you don’t have a poster, but the flower is pretty. There wasn’t much of a background, but black suits the story.



Forewords: 5/5

-I will count the introduction part as the forewords. Your definition for each word was unique and different from what I would think. You also included the genre, background information, and the characters’ names. Though you had all of that, I think it would be better if you told us a little bit more about the characters just to let the reader know about them beforehand.


Plot: 13/15

-Your plot was unique and different, but I’ve read many stories involving assassins before. It’s a good touch, but it’s already been used several times already. The mission was very creative! I would have never thought Mimie would have the H.K. tattoo! You twisted the story and made it your own way. That’s what a great writer does.


Flow: 10/10

-The flow was perfect! It wasn’t too fast or too slow. The fighting part was better than I expected! Most of the time, it would be difficult to create a good paced fighting scene, but you did it! Good job!


Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 13/15

-Your vocabulary was amazing! I have NEVER seen anyone with a big vocabulary as you. There were some words that I haven’t even seen or heard of! Your spelling and grammar was also perfect. There were only a few mistakes, but they were uncommon.


Characterization: 8/10

-I was lost near the middle. The characters were easy to understand, but I had to say, they had common personas. I’d suggest you add more of a twist to your characters’ personality, fate, and past.


Originality: 8/10

-Assassins are seen in many movies and stories. The surprising part was Mimie. I still think you can add a little “something” in there.


Writing style: 10/10

-I don’t really have a problem with your writing style. It’s perfect just the way it is!


Overall enjoyment: 8.5/10

-Like I mentioned earlier, I was got confused when I reached the middle of the first part. I guess it’s just my way of thinking, but it’s frustrating when you get mixed up.


Overall score: 87.5/100

*Sorry for the long wait! I admit- I got a little lazy, but it was a pretty good story! Keep up the good work!