It’s Not As Cool As It Seems by Asian_Innocence

Title: It’s Not As Cool As It Seems
Author: Asian_Innocence
URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/Asian_Innocence
Reviewer: dramafreak4eva @ Lost Shadows
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Title: 4/5
The title though is long but does suit the story. It’s not really eye catching but is alright for a title. I actually like the title as it does explain the whole story without telling much but saying that ‘it’s not as cool as it seems’ is a very good title for your story.

Poster/Background: 9/10
I liked your poster; it’s pretty simple and included the things that were needed in a usual poster. Background was great, no problems for me. Teriyaki18 did a pretty good job overall.

Forewords: 3/5
Your forewords were written well since it is your first foreword and story that you have written on Winglin. You did include a summary and a character description which was a good start. Most reviewers including me do not prefer writers listing the things of a character using a list. Using sentences would be great, it’s just much better than using dot points. I did spot some grammar mistakes which is why I had to deduct a mark off.

Plot: 12/15
Your plot is just fantastic. It may not be one of the most plots but I absolutely loved it. It thing I like it is it’s mostly realistic unlike most fanfics out there which are oh so perfect and just will never happen to me no matter how hard I try. Just the part that Chomin being Yunho’s cousin is just..unrealistic but that really doesn’t matter. The events that happened such as Chomin losing her purse, getting caught by the security officers and others are the ones I really like because they were ‘realistic’.

Flow: 10/10
The flow of the whole story was perfect; you didn’t rush or drag it. It was just perfect. Many people seem to tend rush the intro but I’m glad you didn’t. Everything worked out fine.

Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 13/15
Wow, you used a very wide range of vocabulary in your story. You did have a few spelling and grammar mistakes here and there but they weren’t very noticeable so it’s fine. Nothing was that big to be listed since you did re-read a few chapters. Good job.

Characterization: 9/10
I understood the characters fairly well as you did include quite a lot of details in your story. You had great characterizations in your story as to explaining the characters, objects or just small things. Everything flowed well, the feelings of each person, their actions and other things were nicely flowed and made the story even better. I could imagine the scenes in my head so well. Very well done here.

Originality: 9/10
It is original as the storyline is based on realistic things that can be able to happen to you. Although Chomin being Yunho’s cousin isn’t really original, other things were. I did deduct one mark because of that.

Writing style: 10/10
I absolutely loved it. I can tell straightaway that you did put in effort in your writing. Your writing style is just perfect for me; it’s enjoyed, understandable and lastly neat. No criticism here, just love it. How you wrote your story just really makes the reader asking for more. That’ll lead to more readers and other good things. Although each chapter was very long it doesn’t really matter. Great job, full points.

Overall enjoyment: 8/10
I cannot tell you how much I enjoyed reading your story. I’m also a fan of DBSK and besides that your trailer was great. Glad I’m able to read this story of yours.

Overall score: 87/100

Great job! I’m a strict reviewer so that’s a high mark. Good luck on your future fanfics!