A Friend’s Confession by geesoo

Title: A Friend’s Confession
Author: geesoo
Story URL: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/01GEE/
Reviewed by: jjwyl@lostshadows.co.nr

Title: 3/5

Your title seems to be really plain and straightforward. I would suggest having a title that has more of a meaning and is more meaningful and more complicated. That will make the readers feel interested and feel like they want to know what the story is about.

Poster/Background: 8/10
The overall appearance is great. Your poster looks fantastic and it really blends together well with the font color and background color. But in the poster, all the characters doesn’t seem to be too sad, especially Wooyoung, who should be the one with the depressed expression. In the story, he seems to be the one who gets hurt the most, so I think it would be reasonable to have a picture of him sad.

Forewords: 3.5/5
Your foreword looks great and sounds great. The length is quite appropriate. But the one thing I don’t really like is that it’s so repetitive. And also, it seems like the main characters falls in ‘love’ with so many boys at such a young age.

Plot: 12/15
The overall story was predictable. It was really easy to tell that Jisoo would end up with Wooyoung. But the ending was kind of weird. It was such a sudden end. I didn’t like how you didn’t write about Jay finding out about Jisoo and Wooyoung together. You could have added something about that just so the readers aren’t having a cliffhanger.

Flow: 9/10
The flow of the story was well done, but I thought the ending was just a bit rushed. It seemed like Jisoo wasn’t expecting anything at all. And Wooyoung’s confession was so sudden.

Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 14/15

I didn’t find any grammar or spelling mistakes in your story. You know when to use the right tenses. But I suggest you use a wider range of vocabulary. Make your story look like you know a lot of words.


Characterization: 8/10
I understood what type of person Jisoo and Wooyoung were. And I liked how you described the scene and the way they dress. But because you had the manager and the rest of 2PM in the story, I wasn’t clearly able to see their description. When adding new characters, have a bit of information on each of them.

Originality: 7/10
Even as the first event of their date, you picked a theme park. I found that to be really cliché and really commonly used in other stories and also in dramas. It was interesting to find them going to a theme park but having Jisoo not getting killed by the fangirls. The ending was predictable too.


Writing style: 9/10

I really like the writing style that you have. It’s simple and easy to read. Everything is so neat and organized. But the one thing I would recommend would probably to cut down the length of your paragraphs. I found that some of your paragraphs are really long. But that’s just me. I like paragraphs that have about five to six sentences.



Overall enjoyment: 8.5/10
I just didn’t like the ending. It felt like something was missing.


Overall score: 82/100