Playing With My Heart by ShadowYin

Author: ShadowYin
Title: Playing with My Heart
Link: http://winglin.net/fanfic/SYplaying/
Status: Completed
Reviewer: Rachi @ Lost Shadows

Title: 5/5 ~ I liked the title a lot. It fit in with the story and although it was a bit cliché, it definitely got me interested enough to read on.

Poster/Background: 10/10 ~ My first thought was that the poster was a bit small but then I realized that it fit the background perfectly. Sometimes, clean and simple does the job.

Forewords: 5/5 ~ Woahh, I really liked this one! It was really attention-grabbing, just like a foreword is supposed to be. It also gave me a sneak-peek of what the story was going to be like. Dramatic is the way to go with intros, it really draws in readers. I also liked how the foreword was actually an excerpt from the story while being a good introduction at the same time.

Plot: 13/15 ~ I liked your plot a lot but I wished you elaborated a little bit more on the kidnapping part. I was really excited to see who those kidnappers were, what had happened in there that resulted in a knife in “noona’s” stomach.

Flow: 9/10 ~ Mostly, the transitions were smooth and allowed the story to go from one scene to the next but there were some awkward parts in the story, like when Minho brought her to his house, it took me awhile to differentiate between that, and when she betrayed him and he’d caught on.

Spelling/Grammer/Vocabulary: 15/15 ~ I couldn’t find any mistakes, it was all pretty perfect.

Characterization: 9/10 ~ I liked how you described the girl’s personality through her actions. For Minho, I wish you’d done the same and characterized him through more dialogue and action rather than describing his emotions.

Orginality: 8/10 ~ The betrayal element is found in many different stories so that was a little old but I liked how you added your own twist to it and made it more dramatic. Everything came together really well.

Writing style: 10/10 ~ I love writers like you, I really do. You guys make the rest of us look good. The language was rich. That was something I didn’t expect from a lovey-dovey story about two lovers. Your choice of words and how you used them really got me, more than the actual plot or story did. Your story may have been a repeat but the way you told it made it unique.

Overall enjoyment: 9/10 ~ I enjoyed this story very much. I was just frustrated at how short it was. I think that this kind of story needs to be elaborated and told with a lot of detail. There were many, many things that I still wanted to know – What happened to them in the end? Was she crippled? What did his dad think of her now? What happened to his cute little brother? – so that would definitely have made me like it more. Overall though, it was great.

Overall score: 93/100