stop think..is it really love that we feel?? by kanhosa301

Fanfic Title: stop think..is it really love that we feel??

Author: kanhosa301

Fanfic Url: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/kanhosa301/

Reviewed by: Airah @ lostshadows.co.nr

Title: 2/5- First of all the title is too long. Its not even capitalized. Second, the title is not very eye catching. I notice that you shortened it to stop think.... I at least think that you should capitalize that to: Stop Think....

Poster/Background: 6/10- The poster isn't really eye catching but its alright. The background didn't interfere with the text so that's good.

Forewords: 4/5- I think that you were missing something in your foreword. But I do like the fact that you introduced the characters.

Plot: 11/15- I like your plot but some parts were pretty predictable.

Flow: 9/10- Wasn't really slow or fast. Keep it like that.

Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 12/15- I saw in your forewords that you apologize for wrong grammar. And I did see some. But I won't nag about that. But what I do want to nag about is the YOUR POV thing. When it says YOUR POV that means you have to use I, me, or myself.

Another thing is that you put a thought that the reader had on Jaejoong's POV. That shouldn't happen because there should be no way that a reader's thought would be there because Jae isn't inside her head.

Characterization: 9/10-You captured the characters personality but you could have put a name instead of _______.

Originality: 9/10- Very creative but not that original. Some parts, like I said are too predictable.

Writing style: 8/10- The paragraphs looks messy. You made it more messy by putting the links. Instead of putting the links maybe you could describe it or just put the links in the beginning or end of the chapter.

Overall enjoyment: 10/10- I think that I was a reader of your before because I remember the 'jacket' thingy. XD I was like oh yeah! I remember this!

Overall score: 71/100